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#1 NorthFireZ

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Posted 28 February 2017 - 01:04 AM

Well, here goes nothing I guess.

Hello everyone viewing this topic wondering just what the hell I'm on about? Do not worry, I will explain shortly. See this is an experimental drug that will make you extremely muscular, and increase your testosterone 1000% That is right, for just 9.99 a month you can have the body of a brute and the brains of a mastermind. You know Rahn from Headquarters? Well, he used to be just like you, until he was forced to read this highly unstable drug. However, he came to love it, you will too!

In all seriousness....... it's only 7.99 a month. What a value! And order now to get an extra bottle of MO Fanfiction, and a Blotick plushie, FREE!

This is the kind of writing you can expect delving into my story. Not too great I know, but this is my first attempt at writing a coherent story that I hope to mold into a complete series someday. With the release of 3.3, I knew I had to do something. While others can make great youtube gameplay, or draw amazing pictures of heroes, I only have a keyboard and a story to tell. It is with great honor, and pride, that I present to the Mental Omega community the Prologue to At Mind's End https://www.fanficti...1/At-Mind-s-End I do hope you stop by and read this short introduction to the universe. I picked a starting point where old fans could relate to, and new readers can as well. *wink wink, nudge nudge*
 

 

10/14/17 MODIFYING THE ORIGINAL POST WHOoooooooooooooooooooooooop. Hello there people of the universe. It's been quite a while isn't it? You thought I was dead? NOPE! I've just been completely overwhelmed by a lot of things. But enough about me, what you want to hear about is the new chapter right? Well, I can promise you that it's going to be pretty average in length, however, the content will still be there, action packed as always. This will be the beginning of the World War Arc, and I hope you stay tuned to both Just the Basics and At Mind's End :D

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Posted 28 February 2017 - 02:49 AM

Keep the nice work up :)
I will be tracking this thread for MOre stories to come by

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Posted 28 February 2017 - 03:30 PM

Nice work, amazing.
Makes me think about Yuri's rise between the bolsheviks. We do not know much about that.. other than he seems to be really old



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Posted 01 March 2017 - 06:26 PM

Keep the nice work up :)
I will be tracking this thread for MOre stories to come by

  Thank you! And I will be sure to credit the people who created those epic units if I do decide to use them in the story.

Nice work, amazing.
Makes me think about Yuri's rise between the bolsheviks. We do not know much about that.. other than he seems to be really old


That gives me a good idea :0 Exploring Yuri's mysterious backstory.
P.s Please go easy on me sometimes in game ;p

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Posted 05 March 2017 - 08:54 PM

I have a question for anybody interested in helping me in this endeavor: would anyone like to become a beta reader? Basically, a Beta reader reads the script beforehand and help with grammar, spelling, and critique the writing. I have trouble persuading some of my so called 'friends' to aid me. So, if you are interested just reply to this post. I check daily... not because I don't have anything better to do ;p Even if you do not want to, or maybe can not help, leave your thoughts about the story so far. I'll be happy to answer any questions ^__^ 

 

Have a good day, and may Yuri bless you ଘ(੭*ˊᵕˋ)੭* ̀ˋ


Edited by NorthFireZ, 05 March 2017 - 08:55 PM.

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Posted 05 March 2017 - 10:10 PM

That's actually called a proofreader.



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Posted 05 March 2017 - 10:46 PM

in FFn, they're called Beta Readers

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Posted 05 March 2017 - 10:54 PM

How weird.



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Posted 06 March 2017 - 12:12 AM

That's actually called a proofreader.

I used the term Beta reader because: A) it sounds a lot cooler than just.... proof reader B) The term is according to the theme of Alpha, Omega, Beta, etc C) I strive to be able to become a beta reader on Fanfiction.net. 

 

I mostly just want someone to call my work shit, slap me in the face, then make out with me. 

 

BTW, What did you think of the chapters? :-0 


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Posted 06 March 2017 - 12:27 AM

How weird.


It's not exactly that weird. It's like 'beta testing' phase in game development, you know

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Posted 06 March 2017 - 02:18 AM

Pretty decent work, but Chapter 2 was a little too long for my liking, and a bit confusing. Some grammatical errors around that can be fixed, but overall good job on the work :D


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Posted 06 March 2017 - 03:33 AM

Pretty decent work, but Chapter 2 was a little too long for my liking, and a bit confusing. Some grammatical errors around that can be fixed, but overall good job on the work :D

Thank you for the critique. My English tutor is already chewing me out on the grammar mistakes xD Chapter 2 is probably going to be the longest chapter in the series. I didn't realize how long it was going to be until I actually took a step back after finishing it for the first time. It took up 32 pages on a google doc document. I probably could have cut the chapter in half, and released the second half at another date. However, I could not find a good place to cut the story off without boring people, or making a complete cliff hangar. Took inspiration from the Grapes of Wrath's long ass chapters and released the chapter as a whole. 


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Posted 06 March 2017 - 07:42 AM

Ive read both of them and honestly there pretty good and entertaining to read.  Soo keep it up and good job North x3


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Posted 06 March 2017 - 07:53 AM

It was enjoyable to read Chapter 2, that's for sure (unless you include the grammar errors nagging at me :p)


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Posted 06 March 2017 - 08:55 PM

Good read. Really enjoyed it! Keep it up!



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Posted 07 March 2017 - 06:38 PM

Ive read both of them and honestly there pretty good and entertaining to read.  Soo keep it up and good job North x3

  

It was enjoyable to read Chapter 2, that's for sure (unless you include the grammar errors nagging at me :p)

  

Good read. Really enjoyed it! Keep it up!

Thanks for the kind words ;____;
If you don't mind me asking, without spoiling too much for anyone who hasn't read the two chapters, what did y'all think about the plot so far?

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Posted 08 March 2017 - 08:50 AM

I'm not gonna read that, I read the prologue and I liked it I guess (Even though it had little to do with mental omega) but the second page is a mouthful.

 

Also, there are a few grammatical mistakes.


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Posted 08 March 2017 - 09:11 AM

(Even though it had little to do with mental omega)

 

It is an altered version of Red Alert 1's intro, although then one wonders how Einstein locked/destroyed all the datas about his research when he died (as described in The Gardener) if he committed suicide just after he succeeded.


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Posted 08 March 2017 - 09:26 AM

 

(Even though it had little to do with mental omega)

 

It is an altered version of Red Alert 1's intro, although then one wonders how Einstein locked/destroyed all the datas about his research when he died (as described in The Gardener) if he committed suicide just after he succeeded.

 

I know that.


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Posted 08 March 2017 - 06:12 PM

I'm not gonna read that, I read the prologue and I liked it I guess (Even though it had little to do with mental omega) but the second page is a mouthful.
 
Also, there are a few grammatical mistakes.


Unfortunate that you will not be reading the first chapter. It is a rather self contained story too. I am attempting to sort out the formatting ( and the grammar ofc ) for that chapter as we speak. I did not realize that double spacing does will be ignored when transferring over to Fanfiction.net. So instead I got this jumbled mess of massive paragraphs which I would not mind, but I know others do.

As for referring to Mental Omega, this indeed story does indeed occur in the Mental Omega universe, although a heavily altered one. We all know time travel is a fickle thing, perhaps more changed due to Prof.Einstien's suicide than we yet realize.

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