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#1 Beleg

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Posted 17 August 2008 - 06:18 PM

Home by the Sea by Dauth is a strikingly good short story. At first, you don't know what to make of the Castle/Mansion. Dauth does a great job of letting the story flow. Each paragraph describes something different about the Castle/Mansion and brings to life new thoughts about the house and its residents. By the end of the story, you realize that the "main character" is not the robber, but the house itself. It is wonderfully written, and Dauth is a great addition to Revora's writing.
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#2 Dauth

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Posted 17 August 2008 - 06:52 PM

Thanks for the analysis, did you try the link? It's a useful creepy song that I based the story on.

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Posted 17 August 2008 - 07:40 PM

I second that. Though there are a couple of little grammatical errors, but that's nothing really, a spot of proof-reading would clear that up. Congratulations on a good piece of writing, Dauth.

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Posted 22 August 2008 - 10:14 PM

OK, I have got to know where the errors are, every time I see Revora I remember you've mentioned them and it's driving me up the wall. So they would be helpful thanks.




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