Elven's Random Poems
#1
Posted 28 September 2008 - 10:39 PM
-Calling-
White gulls
Calling
White shores
Crashing
Calling me
White gulls
White shores
Calling me
Home
This one I wrote last summer, while standing on the pier, gazing upon the Sea.
-Hope-
Broken dreams
Broken hearts
Endless pain
Is all they can see
Fighting to keep afloat
Many give in
For the encroaching darkness
Seems forever firm
Hope is lost
They cannot see the light
Their hearts have surrendered
Their dreams shattered
They are not lost
Reach with a helping hand
Help them see
All is not lost
Help them regain
All they have lost
Repair dreams
Restore hope
Befriend them
For with undying friendship
There is no loss
For all is possible
This one..... oh man, this one. Took me forever to write, never really got the wording right. Strayed so far from it's orginal purpose too
#2
Posted 29 September 2008 - 01:13 PM
They are both really good though, you achieve a lot with few words. I can't do that, not at all. Good job.
No fuel left for the pilgrims
#3
Posted 29 September 2008 - 08:33 PM
Funny thing is, I run into trouble trying to use more words
Edited by Elvenlord, 29 September 2008 - 08:33 PM.
#4
Posted 29 September 2008 - 10:37 PM
No fuel left for the pilgrims
#5
Posted 29 September 2008 - 10:42 PM
But that sounds interesting, I'll give it a shot sometime
#6
Posted 29 September 2008 - 11:23 PM
No fuel left for the pilgrims
#7
Posted 30 September 2008 - 11:25 AM
Elvenlord, I would offer you some advice on poetry, but I'm afraid I'm actually terrible at it. My poetry tends to be carefully considered about a particular subject. I surmise this comes from my early exposure to Byron, Tennyson and the Greek poets. The best poem I ever wrote (taking age into account) was about the Hundred Years War. That's about as far as I can help. It might work differently for you, but I find it best to know exactly what you want from a poem, but then see where the tale you tell leads you as well. Poetry is about opinions and emotions, and your writing will probably lead you in the right direction, as far as that's concerned.
#8
Posted 05 October 2008 - 07:54 PM
Everything seems fine
Everything seems right
When all your dreams
Continue to endure
What happens when
Security disappears
Despite all the odds
You're left alone
All shall fade
Your hopes
Your dreams
None will last
Your love
Your life
Everything is dust
Before the wind
What happens when everything.....
Fades
Edited by Elvenlord, 05 October 2008 - 10:59 PM.
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