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[srolojohn]

I guess this is the best place to put this.

 

I wrote this story years ago, on the Lego Message Boards (henceforth known as LMBs) and it was extremely popular there.

This story is a LEGO Hero Factory, and Bionicle Cross over.

 

I only reached 10 chapters, but i will finish it if it gets popular enough.

 

If you need background information on Bionicle, chack out this website; https://biosector01.com/wiki/BIONICLE

 

thank you for your time, and enjoy!

 

 

Chapter 1

        You jiggle in your seat as another meteor hits the wing of your craft. “When will this stop?” you wonder. You are on a mission to take care of some thieves on Necron 8, but this is shaping up to be a rough trip. You turn your head to look at you “brother” and squad mate Verton. “Shaky ride ay, Ered?” he says. You laugh “no kidding.” You respond. You look down at your hero core, the source of life for a hero, and think. You think back to your strange creation. You were told that when Verton was being created, the assembly tower was working double time to assist with operation catch, em, and cuff, em. Verton’s hero core took a longer to activate than usual, and you were accidentally put in the charging chamber at the same time as Verton. But all you remember is a bright flash and opening your eyes to standing next to you and Verton saying “Mornin, bro”. Before you could think any farther back, you are blinded by a purple flash of light. The craft shakes as a voice crackles over the pilot announcement system (PAS) “This is some electrical storm!” shouts Ekkaia, another one of your squad mates and the pilot for the squad,” And it won’t be easy to get out!” Just as the P.A.S. shuts off, the ship suddenly stops shaking. “What was that!?” you shout. You jump out of your seat and run to the plastoid window to see a desert right next to jungle. Then the engines fail.

Edited by srolojohn, 04 April 2019 - 07:20 PM.

[Pasidon]

Is that the whole chapter, or are you holding back the rest like a filthy TEASE?  Might as well post the rest.  We've had entire books posted on here before and people read them.

[srolojohn]

@pasidon, no, it's just a work in progress heres chapter 2, iv'e got 10.5 chpters done.

 

 

 

   Chapter 2

        You tumble away from the window and fall onto Verton. “Git off me!” Verton yells from underneath you. You quickly get off of him and then fall onto the seat next to you while the ship shakes. Your commander Efari runs into the room. She stops and yells, “You two! On your feet!” you and Verton quickly stand up, “get to the escape pods! I have one thing to do before we get out! If I am not there in six or seven minutes, launch the pod without me!” She runs out of the room. “Let’s go!” you shout. You and Verton are running through the corridors. You turn the corner and slam into Dastividous. “What’s Going on!?” he says. “I don’t know!” you say “Efari said to head for the escape pods!” “Okay I’ll come with you!” He says, running after you. As the three of you run down the corridor you glance out the windows and see a decent sized city near where the jungle and desert meet. “I wonder who lives there” you think. You finally reach the door, which opens as soon as you get near it. As you walk through the door, you see three silver escape pods set in holes in the wall. “You and Dastivdous go on ahead. I’ll wait for Efari.” You say to Verton. You watch Verton and Dastivdous blast off. Then Ekkaia and Marito. You wait and wait getting more and more concerned. As you step into the pod you can’t help but wonder what happened to Efari. As you are about to hit the launch button, Efari runs through the door with a package under her arm and screams “WAIT!!!” As she jumps through the door with the package, you hit the button and the doors close and the pod launches off. Jolt from the force of the launch and just as the pod settles down it is shook up again by a massive explosion. You look down at Efari, she is still lying on the floor. She appears to be unconscious. Then the pod crashes into the ground. 

[srolojohn]

CH number 3

 

Chapter 3

You get up off the floor and look around. The escape pod appears to have held up to the crash. “But where are we?” you wonder. You look out of the anterior window, but all you see is sand. You turn away from the window and look down at Efari. Efari was still lying on the floor. She appears to still be unconscious but, besides a few scratches and dents in her armor, she doesn’t look hurt. You decide to see if you can get out of the pod. You try the door, but it refuses open. You ram your arm against it, but it’s no use. You try cutting it open with your sword but that doesn’t work either. “It won’t budge!” you say angrily and slam your fist on the door. You flop down in a seat next you. You sigh starting to feel the weight of today’s events and start to doze off. Just before you fall asleep you think you hear voices, but you fall asleep before you can think too much about it. You wake up to the sound of metal scraping against metal. You look up to see Efari stabbing her sword into the rim of the door. “Ma’am! You’re awake!” you say happily. “Don’t talk to me, I’m trying to concentrate.” She snaps back “And I told you not to call me ma’am!” “Sorry.” You say sheepishly. She tries to push the sword around the rim of the door, trying to cut it open. “Don’t.” you say, “It won’t work.” She pulls her sword out of the door rim. “Then what do you propose we do then if you’re so smart?” she retorts. “I don’t know, but I know that won’t work” you respond. “And how, may I ask, do you know this?” she says. “Because I already tried it” you respond somewhat sarcastically and both of you burst out laughing. Once the laughter subsides you turn around and notice a thin white flame jutting from the rim of the door of the pod. Then, suddenly, the door falls in and light stings your eyes

[srolojohn]

Chapter 4

        You shield your eyes and turn your head to look towards the door.  You see a figure standing just outside the door with an axe in its hand. “Come out of there! All of you!” The figure commands. You and Efari obediently grab your weapons and start to climb out of the pod. “A, a, ah! Leave your weapons.” The figure says. You drop your weapons and climb out of the pod to see a group of six beings of various sizes and colors. Some were blue, some were red, and some, like the one who ordered you out of the pod, were green. The being, who appears to be female, turned to one of the others, a red and gold female with what appears to be a mace, and commanded her to search the pod. While the red and gold being was searching through the pod, the green being turned towards you and said, “Bind them.” At first you think that she is talking to you. Then you realize that she is talking to someone behind you. You turn to see a large, male being walking towards you.  The being is red and has only one arm, on the other arm is a lump of mechanical parts which, you assume, was a mechanical arm at some point. Other than that, he seems to be the same species as the rest, until you notice the large tail protruding from the creature’s back end. The tail is like a scorpion’s but without a stinger. Once the being reaches you, he starts to tie your hands behind your back. “Sorry bout’ this” he says quietly “This ain’t goin’ to be comfortable, but we hafta do it.” After tying your hands together, he moves on to Efari and ties her hands together. After he ties both of your arms, he turns to the green being and says “Finished Marlia.” “Thank you.” Marlia responds. “Gratia! Club them.” Gratia, a blue and gold female with a black cape and a pair black boots, walks towards you and raises her fist. Then everything goes black.

[srolojohn]

 i got fed up with posting it in episodes so i'm going to post what i have so far.

 

                Chapter 4

        You shield your eyes and turn your head to look towards the door.  You see a figure standing just outside the door with an axe in its hand. “Come out of there! All of you!” The figure commands. You and Efari obediently grab your weapons and start to climb out of the pod. “A, a, ah! Leave your weapons.” The figure says. You drop your weapons and climb out of the pod to see a group of six beings of various sizes and colors. Some were blue, some were red, and some, like the one who ordered you out of the pod, were green. The being, who appears to be female, turned to one of the others, a red and gold female with what appears to be a mace, and commanded her to search the pod. While the red and gold being was searching through the pod, the green being turned towards you and said, “Bind them.” At first you think that she is talking to you. Then you realize that she is talking to someone behind you. You turn to see a large, male being walking towards you.  The being is red and has only one arm, on the other arm is a lump of mechanical parts which, you assume, was a mechanical arm at some point. Other than that, he seems to be the same species as the rest, until you notice the large tail protruding from the creature’s back end. The tail is like a scorpion’s but without a stinger. Once the being reaches you, he starts to tie your hands behind your back. “Sorry bout’ this” he says quietly “This ain’t goin’ to be comfortable, but we hafta do it.” After tying your hands together, he moves on to Efari and ties her hands together. After he ties both of your arms, he turns to the green being and says “Finished Marlia.” “Thank you.” Marlia responds. “Gratia! Club them.” Gratia, a blue and gold female with a black cape and a pair black boots, walks towards you and raises her fist. Then everything goes black.

 

                                        Chapter 5

INTIALLIZING BOOT SEQUENCE 44028 in 1…. 2.... 3…. INITIATING. You feel something shaking you side to side. But all you see is darkness. You hear a faint voice “Come on! Wake up! The voice says. The voice sounds female but sounds too distant to tell for certain. “WAKE UP!” a different voice says as you slam into the floor and are jolted back into reality. You are laying face-first on a wooden floor next to a bed. “Nice job, Muaka brain!” the female voice says angrily “Now he’ll probably be unconscious for another day and a half!” You turn over to see a gold and blue being, Gratia you believe, and another blue, white, and silver being standing next to each other looking at you somewhat surprised. “Who are you and what do you want?” you say wearily. “The boss wants us to bring you to her for questioning” Gratia says. “Oh! We haven’t introduced ourselves to you!” she says, “As you may have noticed earlier, my name is Gratia and my talkative friend over here is Vlario.” Vlario grunts in recognition. “Anyway!” Gratia says while opening the door out of the room, “let’s go! And follow me!” She strides out of the room. You follow her out the door with Vlario walking behind you like an intimidating shadow.

 

 

                                        Chapter 6

You, Gratia, and Vlario are walking down a corridor. It reminds you of the movie Lord of the Rings of Saturn with large gaping arches in sequence, which allow sunlight into the corridor. As you reach the end of the corridor, you see a wall. Blank except for a perfectly strait crack in the middle. Gratia puts her hand on the wall in front of you and it separates into halves which that retract into the walls on your left and right. As you follow her out of the door and you see a large marketplace. As you step into the marketplace, your nose is assaulted by hundreds of smells. Some of the smells are sweet, some are salty, and some, like the ones coming from a stall labeled “thornax stew”, are foul. You follow her across the marketplace, making several stops, with Vlario having to remind Gratia what they were doing, before you reach the other side of the market place. You reach another wall with a crack in it. Gratia puts her hand on this wall to and it slides away like the other wall. “How do the walls do that?” you ask Gratia. “I don’t know. I’ve never thought about it.” She responds. As you reach the end of the corridor, you reach another wall with a line in it. After you get through the wall. You enter a room where Marlia, the red being with the scorpion tail, and the red and gold being.

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                          Chapter 7

In the room, besides the three beings, there’s; a table, two chairs, and a lone lantern swinging on a hook on the wall. “Thank you Gratia, Vlario” says Marlia. Gratia and Vlario nod and stand on opposite corners of the room. “Now.” Says Marlia sharply to you “I have some questions for you. Gratia! Activate your suletu!” “Suletu? What in the name of Makuro is a suletu?” you wonder. Gratia walks next to Marlia. She looks at you, winks and then her face starts to glow. You feel a weird sensation. Like someone pushing your mind around. Then the past days’ events start playing in your mind. You remember when you ran into Dastivdous in the corridor, when you launched the escape pod, even when you were laughing with Efari. The sensation stops abruptly. Gratia was laying on the floor face down. Everyone was looking at Gratia. When Marlia spoke you were shocked to hear French. Your auto-translator translated it for you but you can tell the difference between it and the language she was speaking before. “What happened?!” Marlia says. “Huh?” says the scorpion tailed being in German. “Up there!” says the red and gold being in Portuguese. You look up to see a black, male being in the stone rafters of the room. The being suddenly jumps from the rafters onto the red and gold being. “Torin!” shouted Marlia, still speaking French. You assume the red and gold being is Torin. Thinking quickly you grab Torin’s mace and swing it at the black being. The black being blocks it with his shield and swings his sword at you! You jump back and dodge the swing! The being darts around you and rams into Marlia, knocking her out. He turns and then tackles the scorpion tailed being to the ground. Before you can react, the black being punches the scorpion tailed being, knocking him out. He turns to you and dashes towards you raising his sword! Just before he swings the sword you swing the mace and smash him in the side of the head! He staggers away and while he’s distracted you charge towards him with the mace! Just before you hit him with mace, he jumps back to the rafters and disappears. Suddenly exhausted, you drop the mace and sit down on the floor.

 

                                           Chapter 8

 

You wake up on a bed. The bed was similar to the one before, in fact, it was identical to the one before. You sit up and look around. Only now do you realize it was the same room you had been placed in before. Same chair and table in the center of the room, same vase with mechanical flowers on the table, and same door with a long line down the center of it. The door opened and gratia walked into the room. “did you hear!? Did ya!? Did ya!? Did ya!?” Gratia babbles, rapidly. “hear? Hear what?” you respond with confusion. “oh. Right, I was supposed to be the first person to tell you!” “tell me what!” you blurt. “you’ve been cleared!” then out of the blue she hugs you fiercely then lets go. ‘I knew it! I always knew that you weren’t evil!” “So I’m free to go?” “well, I’m supposed to bring you to Marlia to have her formally release you and your companion.” “Efari! She’s here!? Where?!” you exclaim, looking around you as if she could possibly be in the room. “she already with the Marlia. Let’s go!” she quickly jumps up and strides out the door, leaving you no choice but to follow.

 

                                       Chapter 9

Once the door opens to Marlia’s office, you are shocked by the size of the room. While the room couldn’t have been more than 40 square feet, it was at least 100 feet high and covered with shelves that were full of books. In one corner of the room there was a sliding ladder, similar to the ones in the data vault in the hero factory. Sitting in a chair behind a desk was Marlia. In front of the desk was two chairs. One was already filled by Efari, while the other was vacant. Marlia motioned to the empty chair, indicating that you were to sit there. Once you sat down marlia began to speak. “I belive that Gratia has informed you that, you have been pardoned. Correct?” “yes, she has.” You respond. “but did she tell you why?” “no” “well, the reason you have been pardoned is because, the Fist would never remove one of their agents, the agent would remove himself.” ‘What is the Fist?’ You wonder in your mind. “before I let you leave, you must also know that you have been recruited as well.” “what what!?” Efari exclaimed, speaking for the first time since you entered the room. “you may have been pardoned, but we still don’t trust you, so we’re enlisting you in the army for the time being.” “But you can’t do that!” “we can and we shall.” Marlia stated, Ending the conversation. “you are dismissed to the training grounds.” She motioned for you to stand and Gratia escorted you out the door, with Efari grumbling the whole time.

 

                                        Chapter 10

When you finally reach the training grounds, you see several figures of different shapes and sizes doing several different tasks. Some were shooting simple plasma rifles at several bullseyes on one end of the 50-meter field. On the other end of the field several other beings were sparing with each other with various weapons. What stuck out most was the size difference between them all. Some of them were only about a meter tall, while most of them were about 2 meters tall. Then there were the titans. These beings were around four or five meters tall and were very muscular. These beings seem to dominate in the melee combat while the shortest ones seem to excel at target practice. Overseeing it all was a green and silver being with a formidable presence. He had massive hands and a half meter long horn. He was a little taller than the middle beings and was standing on a wooden platform raised a meter above the ground. “Oy! Gratia! These new recruits!?” his deep voice bellowed across the field. “come on! I’ll race you!” Gratia said to you. “alright, on your mark. Get set, GO!” and all three of you break out into a sprint. You reach the small platform first, beating Gratia and Efari to it. “If you all are about done with your games, I need you to climb up here.”

[Gen.Kenobi]

Very interesting so far. 

 

Although I know some of the  Bionicle characters, I believe it would be better if you could add a description of the characters or maybe even images, if they are actually Lego.  

[srolojohn]

Very interesting so far. 

 

Although I know some of the  Bionicle characters, I believe it would be better if you could add a description of the characters or maybe even images, if they are actually Lego.  

 

yeah, that's probably a good idea, but i can't figure out how to get images to appear. i have some Lego models of the characters i can use.

[srolojohn]

Very interesting so far. 

 

Although I know some of the  Bionicle characters, I believe it would be better if you could add a description of the characters or maybe even images, if they are actually Lego.  

 

yeah, that's probably a good idea, but i can't figure out how to get images to appear. i have some Lego models of the characters i can use.