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#1 TeaMaster

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Posted 21 November 2007 - 05:42 AM

I read through the original, and wanted to change a few things in it...


CE 70

(First bit is originally Infinity238's)
Zaft rookie pilots Malik Decardo, Franc Utall, and Shelba Ludecker were busy in the cockpits of their new Ginn mobile suits. Malik was a self-centered person with a bit of an arrogance problem, where as Franc was a bit of a show off. Shelba mostly kept to her self during briefings and training often typing away on here Ginns keyboard. The alarm goes off, an announcement is made requesting all pilots to standby in their assigned units. From there the three briefed of the situation at hand.

Yamada Rikawa a young Mobile armor pilot enlists into EA, at the time his reasons are unknown. Although Yamada took part in the Bloody Valentine Tragedy (February 14, CE 70), yet made no attempt to fire nuclear warhead. Instead Yamada simply abandons the missile and provides support for the Roosevelt and units re-supplying. When ordered to re-supply Yamada shuts off his radio and continues with his business. He is later joined by three other pilots, Kumiko Hamano, Ryoga Amano, and Takahashi Shiro. As the fighting continues the four of them slowly drift away from the fleet, heading towards the peacemaker squadrons. The party encounters an unknown mobile suit, supported by smaller unmanned units, shooting down the few of the peacemaker formations. The assumption that it was ZAFT is quickly eliminated because the Ginns began to shoot at it. The mobile suit spots Yamada & the other and starts to attack. Instinct tells Yamada to move and he effectively evades the attack. The mobile suit leaves as it is being chased by more Ginns. Relieved Yamada checks around. Kumiko's unit is disabled and Ryoga suffered only mirror damages. When he asks for the whereabouts of Takahashi, Ryoga responds that he is KIA. At that moment Malik, Franc, and Shelba comes in and begins attacking the Moebius formation. Refusing to abandon his comrades, Yamada engages the enemy. He damages Franc's Ginn and sends it into the general direct of Junius Seven. Malik rush towards Yamada and the two squares off, they are evenly matched. As the two duel Shelba attack the other two moebius. Seeing this Yamada breaks and intervenes, forcing Shelba to retreat. Malik angry for being neglected shoots wildly at Yamada. Just then Junius Seven is engulfed by a bright light and is destroyed. The Yamada uses this chance to escape and tows Kumiko and Ryoga back to the Fleet.. Back on the Roosevelt the three pilots are thrown in to the brig for disobedience and abandoning their posts. Throughout their time in the brig Kumiko continuously rants of the injustice. Ryoga & Yamada drill their heads into their cell’s wall.

The EA headquarters, however spots the talents in Yamada and Ryoga. All three are released and Yamada & Ryoga enlisted into the elite TS-MA2mod.00 Moebius Zero mobile armor corps. It is there the two meet Mu La Flaga, who acts as their mentor/trainer. They do not see Kumiko until the following year….





Operation Uroboros - April's Fool Crisis (April 1, CE 70): the two are first sent out in their new Moebius Zero units. It is there they develop a attack strategy nicknamed by La Flaga as the “twin hydra,” and Yamada & Ryoga are recognize as aces in the mobile armor corps. Unfortunately ZAFT succeeds their plans and deploys the Neutron Jammers. The two continues their training until the Battle of Endymion Crater (Grimaldi Front) (May 3, CE 70 - June 2, CE 70), the true test begins. It is there Yamada face off with Malik once again. The two are unable to gain the upper hand and the battle ends in the stalemate. It is until Mu La Flaga intervenes, badly injuring Malik. Malik does not return to the battle and is transported (along with others) a way from the Battle zone to receive treatment. At the climax of all the fighting, La Flaga notices an abnormality in his sensors and tries to warn the fleet. However they disregard it, calling him a deserter. Frustrated he orders Yamada & Ryoga to abandon the fighting and follow him out of the battle zone. The EA uses their ice melting microwave-emission device, known as the Cyclops system, to destroy their own resource base, causing heavy casualties and damages on both sides. The 3rd Fleet of the Earth Alliance was wiped out in this battle, along with its elite TS-MA2mod.00 Moebius Zero mobile armor corps, except for the three who escapes. ZAFT forces were forced to abandon the Endymion Crater and withdrew from the moon

CE 71

Yamada & Ryoga are now assigned to escort EA vessel disguised as a transport ship. Along with another transport ship(that has left earlier) they are to head to Heliopolis, importing resources to complete the EA new mobile suits. With them is Kumiko as support. The three use their time to catch, although it is Kumiko doing most the talking… pushing the other towards the brink of insanity. Yamada suddenly remembers the Blood Valentine Tragedy and asks why they disobeyed orders to help him. Kumiko and Ryoga replied because they wanted to. Kumiko added that it all worked out in the end. Shocked Ryoga asks her to clarify, Junius Seven was destroyed. “Exactly,” she says, “We are fighting For the preservation of our Blue and Pure World!” The conversation dropped and the three go about their business.

(Infinity's bit here>>>>>)While in space Shelba is sent on a recon mission to Heliopolis on a lead of military supply ships coming and going through that area. While on Heliopolis Shelba reports 5 new alliance mobile suits at the Morgenroete facility, however the only ship within range of the transmission is a Nazca class vessel. After 4 more days Shelba uncovers schematics for two more mobile suits at the Morgenroate. After pocketing the disk she attempts to leave the colony but the Le Cruset team attacks the port, She is forced to evacuate the colony in a life pod just before it collapses. (done)

Upon their arrival, they find Helipolis is destroyed. Yamada immediately tries to contact Mu La Flaga (who was on the other ship) and the new ship being built, the Archangel, but it proves in vain. Kumiko asks "Did ZAFT do this?" Yamada launches and orders the other two stand-by in case ZAFT was still the area. On his sortie, he finds a life pod and brings on board. There Yamada meets Shelba and the feeling that he met her before. Shelba denies it, but Yamada treats her to lunch. Yamada asks her a few questions. She relies that ZAFT was involved but she only heard through rumors in the life pod. Out of the blue Shelba asks Yamada if all Coordinators are the enemy. Yamada responds what kind of question is that. She relies, "Because I am a Coordinator." Near by officers, as well as Kumiko draw their weapons, aiming their guns at Shelba. Yamada shields her, ordering them to stand down.
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(I’m gonna do this as script)

[Yamada]: (uses himself as a human shield) Stand down. Just what are you guys doing?

[Kumiko]: Get out the way, she the enemy.

[Yamada]: What are talking about? She's no----

[Kumiko]:(irritated) She's the enemy! (Dramatically) ALL COORDINATORS ARE THE ENEMY! (Yamada says as she speaks : What are you....) THAT'S WHY WE'RE FIGHTING THIS WAR!

[Yamada]: (in a stern yet calm voice) Coordinators are not the enemy, ZAFT is. Coordinator or not, Shelba is a citizen of ORB, and as such we are to protect all of them until they are returned to ORB.

Back to regular narration.

Shelba shocked and utterly speechless, clutching on to the data disk. The captain/chef hears the commotion orders everyone to put their weapons a way, he will no have any guns shooting on his ship. Personal that were involved are confined to their quarters. Later the Heliopolis survivors are handed over to a civilian transport vessel, Yamada says his goodbyes to Shelba and comment that it's a pity that they won’t meet again. Shelba turns to Yamada as she is boarding and says nothing. When the ship leaves, Shelba, holding the data disk, says "No, it's a pity we will meet again." She uses her chance to escape. Her shuttle is picked up by the Gamow on rout to meet up with the Vesalius.

To be contunued Cuz ima need to study Chem exam :p

***NOTE:*** sorry... my called my and asked what happened to Franc... like in the original, he is killed during the bloody valentine tragedy....

Edited by TeaMaster, 22 November 2007 - 06:42 AM.


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Posted 21 November 2007 - 05:53 AM

DUDE ARE YOU SOME KIND OF PROFESSIONAL STORY BOARD WRITTER!!!!
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4 THUMBS UP!!!!!!!!!!!!! :p :dry: -or- :spam: :spam: :spam: :spam:

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CAN'T WAIT!! and GL with ur test :spam:

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Posted 21 November 2007 - 03:38 PM

Nice story there Tea so whos gonna be doin the voices? or u guys just gonna use japanese voiceovers and change the subs

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Posted 21 November 2007 - 07:19 PM

that would be awesome!!!

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Posted 21 November 2007 - 11:09 PM

lol nice :dry:

even so. it was good before. but now... NOW I CAN IT AS A WHOLE EPISODE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Great work dude!!! :good:


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Posted 22 November 2007 - 04:21 AM

Ok Moving on.................

The transport manages to rendezvous with the EA 8th Fleet, and better yet the Archangel is with them. The Transport is relieved and the pilots are transfered to the Menelaos, all but Kumiko who remains with the transport ship. A full report is given to Rear Admiral Lewis Halberton. Later Yamada & Ryoga visits the Archangel, there they see the GAT-X105 Strike gundam. La Flaga see them jokes that they're still alive. Ryoga comments how the assigned mobile suit pilot must have felt dealing with the real. La Flaga corrects him telling that the special pilots were killed. Shocked Yadama asks if it was La Flaga piloting the Strike. Before walking off he responds all but one person can pilot the Strike, Leaving the Kids puzzled. Returning the the Menelaos, they help out with their unit's maintenance. Moments later the Le Creuset Team attacked just before the Archangel's re-entry into the Earth's atmosphere. Yadama and Ryoga launch to provide support for the Fleet. ZAFT sends the 4 stolen Gundams and Ginns, among them are Malik and Shelba. Shelba is thinking of Yamada. At one point of the battle Yamada picks up a stray transmission, the voice was Shelba's. Yamada becomes distracted and is taken out out by Malik. Trying to cover/ snap Yamada out of his daze, Ryoga comes to his aid. In the mist of the chaos, Ryoga 's Mobile armor is damaged by the GAT-X103 Buster and destroyed by Malik. Yamada screams out for his fallen friend. Shelba, realizing who she was fighting, takes the damaged M.Zero back to the Laurasia-class, the Zeigler. Yamada is taken in as a prisoner.

To be continued again :dry:

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Posted 22 November 2007 - 05:11 AM

SOMEONE MUST MAKE THIS INTO A VIDEO! PLZ PLZ PLZ I WANNA SEE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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TEA HURRY UP I WANNA KNOW MORE !!!!!!!!!!!!

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Posted 22 November 2007 - 05:14 AM

chill man... why dont u register?

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Posted 22 November 2007 - 05:15 AM

please don't post in all caps, it's very very annoying.


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Posted 22 November 2007 - 05:27 AM

please don't post in all caps, it's very very annoying.


sorry star, won't happen again :dry:

But still his/her story he pretty good. and no i won't register, cuz not many forums like this allow guests to post freely.

Again i'm sorry. -o- 'o' -o- 'o' -o- 'o' -o-

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Posted 22 November 2007 - 09:58 AM

*cough*

this reminds me, since Bucky's dissapeared to who knows where, I need some help in the character development/story development departed.

join me TeaMaster and we can rule the universe...

MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

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Posted 22 November 2007 - 07:38 PM

i rather see him finish this story first.. it's good :spam:

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Posted 22 November 2007 - 09:35 PM

*cough*

this reminds me, since Bucky's dissapeared to who knows where, I need some help in the character development/story development departed.

join me TeaMaster and we can rule the universe...

MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

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Nice Darth Vader reference :) .
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Posted 22 November 2007 - 09:59 PM

betcha star was darth vader :)

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Posted 23 November 2007 - 01:21 AM

*cough*

this reminds me, since Bucky's dissapeared to who knows where, I need some help in the character development/story development departed.

join me TeaMaster and we can rule the universe...

MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

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Yes Together we crush all who oppose us WAHAHAHAHAHHAHA!!! :)

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Posted 23 November 2007 - 03:10 AM

As the resident Sith Lord, i am somewhat amused by the banter. *cough*

Anyway, aluminum falcon, register if you can. It might not be your intent, but you look like a leech, lol...

Hey isnt the aluminum falcon a reference in robot chicken star wars?
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Posted 23 November 2007 - 04:19 AM

I think it is....

Moving on.....

Yamada is thrown in the brig, still dazed from the battle. He jokes that this time it'll be a more quiet experience. Having said that Yamada remembers his fallen friend, Ryoga, and morns for his death. Meanwhile Shelba is on board the Vesalius having to explain her actions. Rau Le Creuset however dismiss the event and advises not to pity the enemy next. He gives Athrun Zala a glance when he said this. When dismissed she asks Athrun what the commander meant but he ignores her question and gives her an assignment. Mailk who is standing nearby walks up to Shelba. He tells her not to take pity of the naturals, after all, they are vermin. He leaves....
Shelba is to watch over Yamada, although he is a prisoner he is allowed to walk freeely in th PLANTS... As long as someone keeps watch. ( this is after 3 weeks in the Zeigler's brig) Malik, on the other hand, is transfered to earth. It is there he meets Kaworu Kusanagi (a member of FAITH), his CO for the time being. He participates in the Second Battle of Victoria (February 13, CE 71), in this operation Malik gets the highest kills than any other of his comrades. His abilities and reports of him in battle reaches Chairman Zala...
Kumiko is enlisted to test the new EA's new MS. She hear news of the demise of the 8th fleet, fearing the worse, she thinks that Yamada and Ryoga are both dead.

Back at the PLANTS Shelba and Yamada gets close. It seems more like the two are dating ratherthan guard duty. Despite being a prisoner, Yamada becomes a custom to his new home. At times even the ZAFT soldiers who lock him up every night forgets that he a prisoner. During one of Yamada's "outings" he is given back some of his personal belongings. Among the items is a ZAFT MS pilot's dog tag. Seeing this Shelba ask's why does Yamada have that. Yamada's face is stricken with pain. He answers it was his cousin's. He explains that when he was little he had a cousin, Fai Katsuro. Fai was Coordinator, but that didn't matter he was family. Yamada describes their relationship as blood brothers. However as time passed Fai changed, he wasn't the same as he wa in their childhood. His smile was gone, and one day Fai returned in a ZAFT uniform. With a gun the last words he said were, "Dam all naturals," and killed both his and yamada's family. Yamada explains that he survived, he was so confused and so angry at the time. He wanted answers..... "Why did you do this?" He would ask. Fai only answered "i'll tell you in the battle field." And so the Yamada finds finds him self in a cockpit of a Moebuis. Yamada goes on with his story, in the battlefield, before the war had even started, they fought. in the end Yamada emerges victorious and the only thing left was a ZAFT dog tag. (flash back over) Looking at the dog tag Yamada begins to cry, repeatedly asking "why do I still have this?" Shelba doesn't know what to say and she asks if she was the enemy. Yamada look shocked looks at her. "you once said 'ZAFT was the enemy, not coordinators.' So does that makes me an enemy?" This question causes Yamada to have a complete emotional breakdown... He doesn't know the answer.

To be continued

Edited by TeaMaster, 23 November 2007 - 04:39 AM.


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Posted 23 November 2007 - 04:51 AM

Yeah my name is from chicken star wars :grin: and no iwont register cuz
A: already singed up for several too many forums :dry:
B: i'll be murdered if i join another forum :xd:

Plus I think we should stop talking about this and comment on Tea's story instead :)

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Tea... that's so sad. :sad:
"you once said 'ZAFT was the enemy, not coordinators.' So does that makes me an enemy?" WAHHHH!!!! :sad2: :sad2: :sad2: :sad2:

tho I don't think in the real world we would let a POW roam freely during the war. But still, Icried when I read this part. :sad2:

A moment of silience for Ryoga, and all who died in this war ^_^

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Posted 23 November 2007 - 05:15 AM

you might aswell join up...

no one's going to take your posts seriousy until then.


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Posted 23 November 2007 - 05:47 AM

there... but now i'm gonna die...

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