Agree with above is a bit long and too many actual-game footage ( with the normal camera position ) . The sound is a bit blurry , and it shows a fixed camera all the time with no special effect . Trailers are meant to have special effects ( a lot of them even like flashes , screen moving or rotating , fast camera moving and instantly view of camera to make it more interesting .)
Tip : Use my Elven Teaser as reference , it's made with the same tools in the same conditions
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Btw I like your trailer's scripts .
Val