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First town : Stefan, Marquess of Alaborn : Orange swatches, scar under eye, cannot be used in local area.
All local areas : Apprentice Mr Adams : A semi honest merchant into blacksmithing and associated trades, (method of entry into servant quarters)
On the roads : Mr Thomas Weaver : Mr Weaver lost his memory at the age of 15 and has no childhood, he rarely speaks unless in battle or drunk, when sometimes he cries to himself just repeating the name "Laura" again and again.

We all know there are dozens of possible systems, Proportional representation, First past the post, mixes, variations in Parliament size. So what would be the best system that you can come up with?

Just for comparison, the US is Governed by less than 600 elected members (435 + 100 + 1 IIRC). We have 637 (IIRC) and the House of Lords.

How would you make a fair and representative Government that would not result in several hung Parliaments?

Name: Thaos Farndale
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Weapons: Always two small daggers and generally at least 1 crossbow. A short sword called wick.
Class: Thief, rogue, bandit, words can be so harsh
Height: 5' 7"
Weight: 11st
History: A street child with a quick wit and a quicker hand, speed and stealth helped him live well. He stole from the rich to give to himself. Thaos has spent his formative years under tables at banquets and also alone with the maids. He can conduct himself in high society barring odd quirks which he quickly corrects. He lives off the wealth of others, portraying himself as a Lord to gain accommodation, where he steals small but valuable items to further his relaxed life. Thaos is never more than two days from being flat broke and constantly tries to avoid this ignominious lifestyle.
Alignment: Neutral

When asked how he makes his way, Thaos replies 'This and that' he doesn't stay in one city for long preferring to move on after a month or so. He is forgiving of drunks but cannot abide thieves or con artists, competition is unwelcome. Thaos can be found in a rich establishment entertaining the ladies and invariably with a glass of sweet wine in his hand. Thaos cannot fight like a warrior but can in buildings use the furniture to his advantage including wrapping enemies in curtains while he makes his escape.

I will not analyse my piece other than to say I should have created something new, as opposed to digging up an old story.

Vortigern:
While I like the concept of love tried across the gulfs of time I think a little more could have been made of the issues encountered within. While the language barrier is a good start, you could have gone into clothing styles, appropriate behaviour for the time, even biological differences. Even across Earth now, some men kiss each other as a greeting, others bow, some hug, some shake hands. These sort of details help bring a story to life and give the characters a bit of depth, which I think is possibly the main weakness of this piece. You used only two thirds of the available 1500 words and as such the story suffered. I find myself thinking its the same as an old man telling a story 4th or 5th hand with some bits enterprisingly made up by the third iteration. I have not spotted any glaring spelling issues, nor grammar problems.

Casojin:
A more traditional view of divisions, separating humans into classes, I like the almost X-Men esqe treatment of the none humans as less than humans. There is a good understanding of character psychology. A snapshot of the military use is an interesting idea, however for someone who had lost parents recently I would expect a ten year old to be more distraught he seems to react in the manner of someone much older. I'm given to understand English isn't your first language which is why I'm not being critical of the errors but can point them out for you if you wish.

Caspa & Matias:
I would be very cautious about entering a poem into a Story Contest as it created the issue of voting for types. I find poems a lot harder to read and as such found them significantly less enjoyable that the other entries. Looking at Caspa's entry there doesn't seem to be any spelling errors but the more I look at it the more it looks like a set of song lyrics. Matias' style is more like the poems I am used to seeing, again no obvious mistakes. The problem I encounter is that without being able to read/write/enjoy poems properly I cannot comment properly on them.

Ravnin IV:
This piece is quite possibly in a class of its own as far as I am concerned. My only real criticism is the swapping around of British/English/Scottish as this is inappropriate for the setting. IIRC the treaty of Versailles was signed on behalf of England and no other names were used. If a reference to someone North of the border was used I would also have made it clearer he was fighting on the side of the English as the history there has been far from bloodless, minor confusion could have happened. The will to write letters home is a very real goal and I think helps bring the characters to life.

I hope my comments help the writers here.

I would like to hear peoples opinions on this matter, I of course would like to only have English MPs voting on English issues, but I am sure the Scottish like to be able to affect us without reprisals.