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#21 Magma1Lord

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Posted 09 March 2017 - 10:33 PM

I have yet to read it but you can use a browser addon, it has a desktop version too. named Grammarly it picks out all the grammar mistakes and suggests how you can write things better.

 



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Posted 14 March 2017 - 08:22 PM

I have yet to read it but you can use a browser addon, it has a desktop version too. named Grammarly it picks out all the grammar mistakes and suggests how you can write things better.
 
https://www.youtube....h?v=fVbE2CSXCJ0


Thank you so much for this! I did not even know this program existed. I will be using this to correct grammar mistakes from now on. Expect much less grammar mistakes from any future writing. Speaking of which, Chapter 2 is going well ;D might even finish this weekend.

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Posted 14 March 2017 - 09:39 PM

I'm looking forward to the (grammar-error free) Chapter 2. :p

Bring MOre stories to spice up Mental Omega. :D


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Posted 18 March 2017 - 11:30 PM

This story is good. Slight problem however...

 

If Einstein killed himself right then and there, how exactly did he manage to encrypt/destroy his work on chrono tech?



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Posted 18 March 2017 - 11:40 PM

This story is good. Slight problem however...

 

If Einstein killed himself right then and there, how exactly did he manage to encrypt/destroy his work on chrono tech?

There's a chance he did it before going into the time machine in that timeline, while feeling the despair caused by his work?


Edited by GuardianGI, 18 March 2017 - 11:41 PM.

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#26 NorthFireZ

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Posted 20 March 2017 - 02:11 AM

This story is good. Slight problem however...

 

If Einstein killed himself right then and there, how exactly did he manage to encrypt/destroy his work on chrono tech?

This story does not follow the 'canon' Mental Omega plotline. One: because it is not completed as of now. Two: because it's basically a fanfiction in of itself. So while I cannot confirm or deny the actions of the members of the scientist team who surrounded Einstien at the moment of his death. I can say that feel free to throw any preconceptions out the window. (ノಥДಥ)ノ︵┻━┻・/


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Posted 28 March 2017 - 03:41 PM

Requesting assistance: what exactaly is Malver's usual clothing??? A robe? A cloak? A batman costume? I can't figure it out through the pixel art, and there are few fan art of Malver in the first place. I just need a general idea, and if no one can give me and answer I'll just make him go into battle with a tuxedo :D

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Posted 28 March 2017 - 06:06 PM

Try a cloak, he's a mysterious man who lives in the desert, just saying😂

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#29 NorthFireZ

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Posted 28 March 2017 - 08:20 PM

Try a cloak, he's a mysterious man who lives in the desert, just saying

I might as well just make him Jesus then. Long beard, wise words, etc
Idk, Malver is so shrouded in mystery that I bet anyone who loses sight of him for more than a few seconds will forget he ever existed on the first place.

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Posted 29 March 2017 - 05:03 AM

Try a cloak, he's a mysterious man who lives in the desert, just saying

I might as well just make him Jesus then. Long beard, wise words, etc
Idk, Malver is so shrouded in mystery that I bet anyone who loses sight of him for more than a few seconds will forget he ever existed on the first place.
If you want me to say, people normally only lose sight of him thanks to one reason... Because they are dead...

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Posted 29 March 2017 - 05:43 AM

 

Try a cloak, he's a mysterious man who lives in the desert, just saying

I might as well just make him Jesus then. Long beard, wise words, etc
Idk, Malver is so shrouded in mystery that I bet anyone who loses sight of him for more than a few seconds will forget he ever existed on the first place.

 

Lol that's what game units think if they lose their cloak detector unit.

 

"Hey, that's Malver!"

 

*robot tank dies*

 

"Oh never mind, he's gone"

 

Anyway, Malver's cameo suggested cloak


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Posted 29 March 2017 - 06:23 PM

I somehow feel like Epsilon is a bunch of hooded hobos wearing violet trying to take over the world one meal at a time. You know, just from their constant limited resources missions.

So I will give Malver some sort of Cloak, although highly impractical in actual combat, I can 'see' the uses of a cloak for an assasin.

Libra incoming in the next chapter too. In glorious knee socks and a hoodie ;p

P.s By the diddly way, do y'all like longer chapters like Chapter one? Or moderately short chapters like Chapter 2?

Edited by NorthFireZ, 29 March 2017 - 06:31 PM.

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Posted 30 March 2017 - 03:54 AM

I somehow feel like Epsilon is a bunch of hooded hobos wearing violet trying to take over the world one meal at a time. You know, just from their constant limited resources missions.

So I will give Malver some sort of Cloak, although highly impractical in actual combat, I can 'see' the uses of a cloak for an assasin.

Libra incoming in the next chapter too. In glorious knee socks and a hoodie ;p

P.s By the diddly way, do y'all like longer chapters like Chapter one? Or moderately short chapters like Chapter 2?

Just write the story according to how you are feeling it should be, since everyone has their own opinions and views on MO storyline...


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#34 NorthFireZ

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Posted 14 May 2017 - 06:30 AM

Making a little poll (Nobody will ever see this anyways). I want to see if how many people want me to start right away with the next arc, OR if I can take a little excursion and make a silly chapter about nonsense (with the Epsilon squad of course)

 

If I do make the silly chapter, it's probably going to be high school shit, probably some kind of Dere action, probably all very unappealing to the general public. 

 

Just wondering. Leave a comment if ya like to see that chapter (づ ゚⏠ ゚)づ 


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Posted 15 July 2017 - 11:26 PM

It's a wonderful day to be a Soviet Soldier is it not? I've kind of based the Conscript's designed in my story off of the Helghastian Empire's own foot soldiers. Not as elite of course, but with the same helmet design. Funny thing is Conscripts will never be as scary as the Helghast soldiers, but they can certainly try.

 

Is there anything I should add to the reconstructed Chapter One? Any mistakes I missed? Give me a reply, and I will fix it right away. 


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Posted 15 October 2017 - 03:20 AM

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Here it is boiz, season three of RIck and Morty just as promised. Hehhhhhhhh My lame attempt at a joke will NOT reflect the effort put into this chapter as a whole. 

 

-Hello there people of the universe. It's been quite a while isn't it? You thought I was dead? NOPE! I've just been completely overwhelmed by a lot of things. But enough about me, what you want to hear about is the new chapter right? Well, I can promise you that it's going to be pretty average in length, however, the content will still be there, action packed as always. This will be the beginning of the World War Arc, and I hope you stay tuned to both Just the Basics and At Mind's End  :D 


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Posted 29 December 2017 - 08:50 AM

https://www.fanficti.../At-Mind-s-End 

 

Chapter 7 is done. I've put a lot of... thought into this one. I'm not entirely sure but I think I'm getting better at this as I go along. Hope you enjoy this because I enjoyed writing the legend of Orc 3 however cheesy it might be. 


Edited by NorthFireZ, 29 December 2017 - 08:53 AM.

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Posted 28 January 2018 - 03:53 PM

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Chapter 7 is done. I've put a lot of... thought into this one. I'm not entirely sure but I think I'm getting better at this as I go along. Hope you enjoy this because I enjoyed writing the legend of Orc 3 however cheesy it might be. 

 

Do you watch movies and sort of pick up ideas on how to approach storytelling? Perhaps reading scripts to movies you've seen. Or is it mostly books? Just curious.



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Posted 30 January 2018 - 08:09 PM

dude thats was an amazing story



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Posted 30 January 2018 - 09:23 PM

https://www.fanficti.../At-Mind-s-End 
 
Chapter 7 is done. I've put a lot of... thought into this one. I'm not entirely sure but I think I'm getting better at this as I go along. Hope you enjoy this because I enjoyed writing the legend of Orc 3 however cheesy it might be.

 
Do you watch movies and sort of pick up ideas on how to approach storytelling? Perhaps reading scripts to movies you've seen. Or is it mostly books? Just curious.

It’s a combination of all of those things. Story telling isn’t unique to a single piece of media. You have to examin the masters at work and know why it connects together the way it does. I watch a lot of production analysis, script analysis, and back stage videos too.

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